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To5 Minute Freewrite: Sunday - Prompt: fourth
To be born sometime in the future.
He should be a boy, yes! A boy.
For he will bring with him a legacy,
from me and my father.
We may not be together for the time when he arrives.
He may not bring my name from my father,
for my son may not bring mine.
We may not know each other,
for I may not be alive by the time he has come.
If I'm alive I may not be as functional,
same as the time I made this rhyme.
But I am sure I will give my name to my next one,
if my special someone permits it to be done.
I hope we can meet.
The son of my son.
For I am the second.
My son is the third.
Hope he'll give you my name
from your great grandfather.
@Mariannewest, this was my first time doing this 5 minute freewrite. I hope you can guide me and excuse me in case I made any mistakes, hoping for your kind consideration.
Thanks!
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That was some fast thinking to do in 5 minutes. :-) Nice poem.
Welcome @bitsendpieces to freewrite. You can't make mistakes here, that's why I like it.
Wow! This is fantastic, especially for a freewrite. You really conveyed a lot of feeling and imagery in so few words. Great post!
And I was wondering if I fail. Aha. Thanks! :)
Thank you! Felt a lot better since someone recognize my work. :)
Thanks! :)
Welcome in the freewriters community. A nice poem talking about generations!
Heck no, no fail. And you're welcome. :-)
don't worry. There is no right or wrong when it comes to freewriting. Just doing it!! And knowing that some days, something really great will happen in the 5 minutes and sometimes, not so much. it is all good.
I think you did very well in your first try :)
Thanks! I was motivated to join again in the next Freewrite. :)
Thanks! :)
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STOPGreat quality! I loved the rythm of your poetry. Welcome in our community and, as @mariannewest rightly said, here you'll never "fail" so .. let the wings of your creativity take off!