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Worldwide Cypher Jam (round 29) RAW RAP
I would love to hear your feedback on this sess, this is a Worldwide Cypher Jam round 29 by @termitemusic
LYRICS:
i'm having fun even with a dime,
life gave me lemons and I made a lime,
were you that thirsty? read between the lines,
but firstly, listen to these rhymes,
i'll take you on a journey with a happy end
even if you burn me, you are still my friend
rising like a phoenix, spreading our wings
these new beginnings, learning new things
accepting our feelings so we fly above the skies,
above the nationality, above the fucking lies,
Call it a reality while wearing a disguise
where is morality when an innocent dies
I shit on the rules and puke on the law
hear the street blues this shit is raw
his father left, he's crying on the floor
mocked by peers, but it ain't his fault
crusing the streets with all his flaws
watching the misfits acting like demigods
digging their pits accepted the odds
but he isn't who he was
Replies (10)
This is absolutely adorable! Lyrics are super positive and very nice 💚
Glad you liked it, thank you💚
Bravo, samo naprijed!!!
Hvala :)
You're so talented like Eminem! Wow!
nice work bro, could work on tightening up the flow a bit and enunciating your words a bit clearer. great content and vibe though. what's your mother toungue? might wanna rap in that :)
Thank you, I am not sure what do you mean about tightening up the flow :D Care to explain? :)
Yea definitely I am trying to work on enunciation a lot but I was talking with my upper lip down to hide that I don't have a tooth for the last 6-7 years... It's hard to get it back to normal when I am speaking xD Croatian is my mother tongue but I think most people won't really feel those lyrics :D
Not sure anyone can beat him :D Although I will give it a go in a couple years :D Thank you
I'd love to hear you spit in Croatian man! I think rapping in English is overrated honestly, I try and mix it up sometimes with the bit of Malay and French I can speak.. About the tightening of the flow, mainly it's the way your syllables syncopate with the beat, now this could be due to the factors you mentioned above, but I often hear it with emcees who don't rap in their mother tongue.. get what I mean?
I think I get what you mean but I am not sure, is that when you like do a lil pause in the middle of the word when you rap? like the enunciating part of the word? I will mix a lil bit of Croatian in next sess :D I would love to hear you mix it up with French and Malay :D